We went through a long process of scripting. We initially had quite a long speech from the guy, however this was too long-winded and dragged the sequence on so we cut it down again.
Draft 1:
MAN:
(He releases a deep breath, as though a weight is lifted off his shoulders)
So he decided to send someone with a little class. You’re fresh out of the farm, aren’t you? Only time a mark gets to talk is if the asset is a little green. Should have shot me before I said anything. Now that bastard gets to know that I had time to think about the fact I was dead. What kind of twisted asshole does that?
Silence.
MAN:
Pour me the rest of that scotch.
She pours.
Someone once told me it “takes the edge off”. Doubt that applies to a 9mm to the skull though.
He drinks.
Fuck, that’s gonna hurt. You should do it when I’m not expecting
She shoots.
Draft 2 and 3:
We eventually went with Draft 3 but cut the third line and Lotus's dialogue to make her character more mysterious.
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