Here is a rough first draft of the script I have written up focusing much more on the dialogue then stage directions or any technical description of shots. It's mostly to give a rough idea of the dialogue and the shape the scene will take at this stage:
Enfield, London, 23rd February 8:00am
Wife: Goodbye darling. I’m going shopping after dropping her off so I’ll see you in a couple of hours (Kisses the top of his head)Have a lovely day
Michael: Bye darling.
Daughter: Bye Dad!
Micahel: Don’t I get a kiss?
Daughter: I’ve got to go to school Dad!
Michael: (Laughs) Okay. Have a great day
(Door slams. Michael sighs. Picks up plate, brings it over to sink to wash up. Suddenly there is a knife on his neck. )
Lotus: Hello Michael...
Michael: Lotus?!?
Lotus: (Laughs cruelly) You know me too well Michael.
Michael: I thought you were in jail. You had at least 10 years left.
Lotus: Things change Michael. I mean look at you. Nice house, wife and kid, quite a life you’ve got now. But you’ve been a bad boy...And the boss isn’t happy about it. (Pulls the knife in tighter)
Michael: (half laughs, teasing) Do you think you’re going to kill me?
Lotus: I know I’m going to kill you Michael.
Michael: You couldn’t kill me, I knew you couldn’t.
Lotus: (digging the knife in) You know nothing about me Michael.
Michael: I know that you couldn’t kill me.
Lotus: (Presses hard, forcing him to sit down) I could slice this knife right through your neck right now Michael. (Runs knife across his neck, blood starts to spill down.) But I’m enjoying this too much.
Michael: You won’t enjoy this, I promise you...
(Fight. Ends up with Lotus on the floor, Michael opening gun compartment looking for gun. It’s gone!!!)
Lotus: Are you looking for this
(Lotus standing up, holding gun towards him)
Lotus: I know where you keep your guns.
(Shoots him. As he luys on the floor bleeding she bends down, right up close to his face, to talk to him.)
Lotus: You don’t f***with him Michael. And you definitely don’t f*** with me. (or "mess" as a subsitute)
(Removes gloves etc, walks into garden. Takes out phone)
L.A, California, 23rd February, Midnight
(Boss sitting in hotel lobby. Gets call and takes it outside.)
Lotus: This is Lotus. Mission Accomplished.
Boss: Good. Return to base.
(Snaps phone shut. Walks off down Hollywood Boulevard)
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