Storyboard

Here is our group storyboard.  There are a total of 35 shots in our sequence, ranging from closeups, which are shown in orange, to mid-shots and long shots which are shown in purple and green.  Doing our storyboard in this way has helped us balance out the range of shots in our sequence, as we were able to see if we had too many closeups or too few midshots.  We finally created a suitable mixture of shots so that our sequence is interesting and engaging for the audience.   Our titles for our sequence are not in this storyboard as they will be entered digitally on Adobe Premiere Pro when we produce our animatic using these stills.  From this we will hopefully create a rough structure to our sequence.

Locations Addition

In addition to shooting in the kitchen like we posted earlier, we are also going to have the character cross into the front room, as the glass doors work well, and here is a more suitable place for him to sit and relax.

More script Drafts and final script

We went through a long process of scripting. We initially had quite a long speech from the guy, however this was too long-winded and dragged the sequence on so we cut it down again.

Draft 1:

MAN:

(He releases a deep breath, as though a weight is lifted off his shoulders)

So he decided to send someone with a little class.  You’re fresh out of the farm, aren’t you?  Only time a mark gets to talk is if the asset is a little green.  Should have shot me before I said anything.  Now that bastard gets to know that I had time to think about the fact I was dead.  What kind of twisted asshole does that?

Silence.

            MAN:

Pour me the rest of that scotch. 

She pours.

Someone once told me it “takes the edge off”.  Doubt that applies to a 9mm to the skull though. 

He drinks.

Fuck, that’s gonna hurt.  You should do it when I’m not expecting

She shoots.

Draft 2 and 3:

We eventually went with Draft 3 but cut the third line and Lotus's dialogue to make her character more mysterious.

Audience Research

Having decided on a target audience the group asked me to do some research into our audience:
Target audience: 16-24 Male and female


I found the BFI's 2011 statistics yearbook which focused on the year 2010.
Here are some statistics I found:

As this data shows we have chosen a lucrative audience, as they visit the cinema the most. We have also chosen a good genre to target them with as many action films (e.g Kick Ass, Inception, Iron Man 2) made the list of the most popular films within that age group.

However the thriller aspect of the film might appeal to the 25-34 demographic more as the most popular film for them was Green Zone, a thriller. Most of our film is action however, but the 25-34 year olds could well be a strong secondary audience.

Genre research

Here some research into our two main genres from Wikipedia:

Thriller
Thriller (also Suspense) is a broad genre of literature, film, and television programming that uses suspense, tension and excitement as the main elements. Thrillers heavily stimulate the viewer's moods giving them a high level of anticipation, ultra-heightened expectation, uncertainty, surprise, anxiety and/or terror. Thriller films tend to be adrenaline-rushing, gritty, rousing and fast-paced. Literary devices such as red herrings, plot twists and cliffhangers are used extensively. A thriller is villain-driven plot, whereby he or she presents obstacles that the hero must overcome.

The primary elements of the thriller genre:

• The central protagonist(s) faces death, either their own or somebody else's.
• The force(s) of antagonism must initially be clever and/or stronger than the protagonist's.
• The main storyline for the protagonist is either a quest or a character who cannot be put down.
• The main plotline focuses on a mystery that must be solved.
• The film's narrative construction is dominated by the protagonist's point of view.
• All action and characters must be credibly realistic/natural in their representation on screen.
• The two major themes that underpin the thriller genre are the desire for justice and the morality of individuals.
• One small, but significant, aspect of a thriller is the presence of innocence in what is seen as an essentially corrupt world.
• The protagonist/s and antagonist/s may battle not just on a physical level, but on a mental one as well.
• Either by accident or their own curiousness, characters are dragged into a dangerous conflict or situation that they are not prepared to resolve.

Action
Action genre is where one or more heroes is thrust into a series of challenges that require physical feats, extended fights and frenetic chases. They occasionally have a resourceful character struggling against incredible odds such as, life-threatening situations, an evil villain, and/or being chased in several ways of transportation (car, bus, truck, etc.), with victory achieved at the end after difficult physical efforts and violence. Story and character development are generally secondary to explosions, fist fights, gunplay and car chases.

Film pitch feedback sheet

 Year 12 film pitch feedback group 2

We pitched to the class and our teachers today, however we didn't quite get the green light as several changes are needed, and lots of points need to be more clear. The feedback is listed above.
Individual reflections of this are on our individual blogs.

Revised Film Treatment

We have created a treatment for our film so that when we pitch it to the teachers they they can use it to support what we are saying and visualise the film better.