Teachers Improvements

After our test shoot we showed our teachers our rough cut and we recieved feed back which we took o to make sure our real production is successful.

These are the notes we made when running through the rough edit with Mrs Blackborrow, Mrs Dymioti and Chris, our technician.
Many points and issues came up. The main ones were:

• Changing the opening shots so it did not include as many shots of knives as this is a genre convention of horror, not action/thriller. Focus more instead on items like cigars and whiskey to create the uneasy image we are going for.
• Making it look like the action is continuing beneath the titles.
• Lingering the shot where he picks up his briefcase and replacing the match on action of the door with a new title.
• Including more camera movement.
• Making the gun scene less static by shooting from more angles.
• Get rid of jumps
• Use more interesting framing in the gun scene to draw in audience
• Include shots such as CU of money in briefcase (match on action), assasin picking up briefcase and possibly her taking off her gloves
• Using better lighting to get rid of the grainy image.
• Make things faster-faster shots and possibly a cut down script.
• Use make up and effects for the gunshot.
• Use better props for better mise-en-scene e.g briefcase, whiskey glass, whiskey bottle.
• Making the gun scene a lot more dramatic. Possible ways we discussed were non-digetic sound effects, zoom in to the guys face see a change of expression then zoom out to see the gun, or even a fade to black of the guy in his relaxed state with a sudden jolt back to the image as the assasin appears.